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Irina Kaiser's picture

The tagline is excellent!

Irina Kaiser
Activity Score 60
Marketing Manager
creativemobs's picture

Awesome Copy, Excellent Layout!!!

Hats off guys...

creativemobs
Activity Score 18
Copywriter
tango48's picture

leaves no place for comments, says it all itself

tango48
Activity Score 7
prajith kumar's picture

Hats off guys...

prajith kumar
Activity Score 52
Creative Director
Black.Rainbow.'s picture

Not bad, though I think the concept of amputation might have been stronger.

In adition, the word 'reduces' sounds a little technical in that people rarely say about themselves 'I want to 'reduce' weight'.

Rather, words like 'loss' or, in this case, 'lowers' might lend it a more natural connotation.

In addition, I think using the word 'you' or 'your' would be more direct, more powerful. 'Smoking lowers your weight' might be stronger, for example. Or 'Lose weight. Smoke.' and so forth.

Still, it's reasonable, if lacking a little sophistication in the wording department.

Black.Rainbow.
Activity Score 162
My desk
Brainchild Theories's picture

ha! fabulous

Brainchild Theories
Activity Score 74
Graphic Designer at Transmedia Creative
shaun027's picture

Sometimes more is less. Brilliant, concept through to execution!

shaun027
Activity Score 4
Art Director at second year BA, Creative Advertising & graphic Design
Irina Kaiser's picture

The tagline is excellent!

Irina Kaiser
Activity Score 60
Marketing Manager
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